Monday, April 6, 2009
Persuasive Critique - Section I
Post your persuasive critiques here. I want a critique posting that contains length in the details. Please include your thoughts about the topic and content of the presentation. Then, include three strengths and three improvements regarding their message. Please be sure to address both content and delivery. Remember, this is a persuasive message. What parts of the presentation were or were not fully supported? This is your last critique. I want to see depth now in the critiques. Show me that you have learned what makes for an effective message and speaker by your choices of points discussed here from our semester long discussion on effective communication. This critique is due by May 1st.
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ReplyDeleteKatherine had a good opening she stated that she did not really know what to do. In the beginning she was a little nervous, I could tell by her voice, but as the speech progressed she became more comfortable. Katherine backed up her points with strong details, I could tell that she did her research properly and knew her stuff. In addition she cited her points verbally and visually. Her organization of her speech was good, it followed a structured format, which also integrated transition throughout. Overall she did a great job, her voice was clear and conversational, she stood up straight, and she connected to the audience by looking them straight in the eye, however I think she looked at the PowerPoint too much, it distracted me from the purpose of her speech.
ReplyDeleteI think Mike C. did an excellent job with his presentation. He obviously was extremely passionate about Pixar, and it really showed in his speech. He had very good information and showed he put a lot of research into his presentation. He also kept very good eye contact and really connected with his audience. Mike still could make a coupe improvements to his presentation. Mike did not verbally cite all his sources. Mike also got distracted a couple of times by things in the audience. At one point a cell phone beeped, and Mike was quick to point it out. Even though he was just trying to add some humor to his presentation, it distracted him a bit. However, overall Mike did an excellent job with his presentation.
ReplyDeleteI critiqued Brandon Hess. For his speech, I think he had a nice intro, and a good connection with the crowd. However, he was moving around, walking around which had me turning my head back and forth to see what was on the slides and what he was doing. I think his presentation was too wordy and hard to retain everything he was saying. He said everything loud and clear, but his points were a bit too detailed which covered too much to remember all his points well.
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ReplyDeleteOverall, Michael did well with his presentation. He spoke about wanting to become a sale person for the BMW Company. There were many things he did well, yet there were many things he could improve on. He had a good attention getter by putting a picture of the company’s owner there. His thesis statement was clearly stated. But he also forgot to state a statistic information for his work cited and here was no verbal citing in his presentation. But he did follow the steps of the presentation. He did often look at the computer screen and the PowerPoint. He did have a very conversational style speaking toward the audience. He also did very well in the need and practicality part. He stated what he wants to be and work for and how his education and work experience can be a fit for the company. For example, he talked about his need to be a sale person. He talked about his work experience in sale and his ability to connect with people and also his ability to network. He also speaks with a passion for the job. But in the practicality, he did not talk about what the company needs and now he can offer to those needs. That is something he needs to improve on for next presentation. Also, he talked about benefits the company will give him in the plan part instead of the practicality. Furthermore, he needs to remember his major because he accidentally said accounting instead of marketing in the conclusion. Overall, I think he did a good job with the presentation.
Venessa started her presentation off with a good attention getter. The background information she gave about herself was really good along with the information she gave about the company she is interested in. Her body language showed she was comfortable while speaking to the class. She also held good eye contact with the audience which made a strong connection between her and us. She had a lot of good details about her previous work experience and how all the skills she learned from past jobs will help her be successful in filling the position she is interested in. Venessa used a great example to help the class understand better what her job would entail by providing a reference from a movie to her presentation. When she did this I was able to relate better to her topic and was interested more in what she was saying. Although her details and explanations were strong, the structure of her speech was out of sequence which made it hard for me to follow along with it. The visual citations were lacking in her powerpoint and when she did cite they weren’t correct. This made her speech less persuasive and more informative. She could also improve on the transitions she used in her presentation since I didn’t hear too many. Overall, Venessa seemed really passionate about her major and working in the business field which made her presentation interesting.
ReplyDeleteI critiqued Brandon Feinstein I think he had a great attention getter. His posture was good and stood up straight and did not move or sway back and forth. Brandon also had a good connection with the audience and good eye contact. However he could of slowed his speech pattern down a little bit he did talk fast. Other wise it was a good speech.
ReplyDeleteKyle did a really good job with his presentation. I liked the overall content of his speech because we are both interested in insurance companies, so I got to learn a little more about the company he wants to work for. Three strengths Kyle had were that he used a good attention getter in the beginning, he used a lot of good cites both verbally and on his slides, and he had a great plan of action which was to keep his grades up and stay in touch with employees at the company he wants to work for. Some improvements Kyle could have made are to use more eye contact because he was reading off his cards a lot, he also said "um" and "uh" a few times throughout the speech. On the other hand, most of the content on his slides was supported with cites which was good. Overall I think Kyle did an awesome job.
ReplyDeletei critiqued Rob I thought he did a great job with his attention getter. He did not show any signs of being nervous, and his posture was good and relaxed. I thought Rob's format was done well making it easy to follow all of his steps. I think his cites were done correctly just could of used a few more. I think his tone of voice was very conversational which kept the audience focused on what he had to say. The only thing besides more verbal sites and visual sites that I thought could have been improved was a little more eye contact and less looking at the note cards, other than those two things I thought Rob did a very nice job on his speech.
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ReplyDelete"Mike Hagan's blog" Ron K really did well with his speech. What I believe made it so good is that he really executed the steps needed in order to get his point across. Although he followed the steps and gave a great speech he tended to look at his note cards too much but that wasn't too much of a factor because he used technical jargon and appropriate humor. By doing this he created a more comfortable atmosphere for the audience and was able to connect with them. In all Ron K. provided a great speech and I feel as if he really wants to become a officer of the law and is sincere about what he wants to do. "Mike Hagan's blog"
Ellie's speech came out extremely strong with her attention getter and overall introduction. She connected with the audience very well due to her conversational voice and she seemed very enthused about her speech. Her posture was very strong, she had good eye contact, and great information. Her transitions could have been a bit stronger, but aside from that everything else proved to be great. Her information was backed by cited sources and she had great content. Overall, she had a great performance on her speech and there wasn't much to correct.
ReplyDeleteOverall Rachel F did a very good job on her presentation. Her rate of speech was a little fast so I would advise her to slow down, it might just be a nervous habit. Her style also needs to be a little more conversational so that she can make a connection with the audience. She didn't seem very enthusiastic when presenting so I would suggest that she should portray more passion when talking, espeically about a topic that involves your future career. She made good eye contact with the audience and the volume of her voice was at a good level, which made it very easy to understand. The content of her speech was impressive. She had a lot of evidence that supported a very detailed presentation. She cited appropriately which showed the audience credibility. Her "30" second commercial was well-prepared and is ready to be presented to future employers. Great job Rachel!
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ReplyDeleteMike L. gave a great persuasive speech about why he would make a great accountant. He started his speech with a great attention getter that really got the audience's attention. He also had very good eye contact throughout almost the entire speech. This is very important to keeping the audience connected. His content was great, there was a great thesis, good transitions, and great action details. One of the things that Mike L. needs to improve on is the fact that he started reading off of his note cards towards the middle of the speech. He also needs to slow down the rate at which he is talking. Sometimes it is hard for an audience to comprehend new information if it is told too fast, so slowing down the pace would be a great benefit. The last improvement is that some cites were missing, and this is very important to keeping a speech persuasive as opposed to making it informative. But, overall Mike L. did a fantastic job with his persuasive speech, and even used some comedy which helped to relate to the audience and keep their full attention. "Ron K.'s Blog"
Josh's persuasive speech was about management consulting. He did quite well with his attention getter and it achieved what it was meant to be. He had extremely good citing about all the points in his speech. I just wish he would have explained more details about the education requirement and describe the exams he will have to take in the future. Very good details about Morgan Franklin, and his hand gestures to emphasize his speech also helped with keeping connected with the audience. However the hand gestures got to the point when he would end up with playing with the clicker and I did notice him almost drop it. Very conversational speaking but wished he would slow down a little. He did give out a lot of details but he was talking a tad bit too fast to take it all in at once. He seemed passionate about his desires and his background alone gave me enough details to believe he will be a successful consultant.
ReplyDeleteOverall, Jason's speech was very well put together and executed nicely. He had a good tone and described his need well. He cited very well throughout the speech I believe only forgetting one cite. He had a good thesis statement and did bring up his works cited. However, he could have said one specific example of information he got from a source. Some thing he could of done to improve his speech would be to practice a little more so he could sound more confident. Also, he could have worked a little more on his attention getter and add more details and supporting evidence to the speech. Finally, i would advise him next time to add a memorable statement at the end of his speech in order to leave a strong last impression. Besides all that, Jason did a very well job covering the steps of a persuasive speech and overall an exceptional job on his presentation.
ReplyDeleteTrevor’s persuasive speech was interesting to watch. He presented the class with informative details about himself and the company that were well thought out. He stayed in the allotted time frame and his conclusion was memorable and motivating. His nonverbal communication, including voice and body language, were strong and confident. His voice had vocal variety or was not monotone; he had great eye contact and was personable, which are characteristics that made Trevor an effective communicator. However, there were a few things that needed improvement. The information presented was out of sequence and the four main points were not in proper order. He had cited visually on the slides, but he did not verbally cite as much. He also did not effectively connect his qualities and accounting skills to the accounting firm he is desired to become employed.
ReplyDeleteDavid had excellent eye contact throughout his entire presentation. At times however he lacked enthusiasm and occasionally read from the power point more than he probably should. His ideas presented though were great, although they would have been better with a formal intro. At times I found some of the information presented to be irrelevant and a lack of citations. Davids practicality was great and although he didn't have a memorable statement his argument was somewhat strong and I enjoyed his presentation.
ReplyDeleteBranden H. did a really good presentation. He was confident, informative and most of all it seemed that he was communicating to each one of us rather than to the whole class, which is a big plus on his work. His eye contact with the class was perfect, and he was not monotonous. Branden also had a nice attention getter. He however forgot to cite in 1 place which I believe was the 3rd slide. He could also have been a little more enthusiastic. His presentation was all in all a good one because he did what many people couldn't do: Caught our Attention.
ReplyDeleteLeandra I felt did much better during this speech then her informative one. She had a very good conversational voice and connected with the audience well. She seemed very conformable up their and I felt that she knew what she was talking about. During her last speech I remember that she was talking very fast and it was very hard to follow because nobody in the class could comprehend all the information that fast. But, during this speech she was talking at a very slow pace and really explained her presentation well. Their were only two things that I saw that she could improve upon. First, was her posture. She was leaning over the podium a little and it was a little awkward to look at. I have learned through my experience through in this class that the way you handle your body movements in front of audience just comes in time and she shouldn't have problem fixing this error. The other thing is that her citing was a little bit off. She needed to present the citations a little bit better. The way I do it is I have a note card with only the citing information on it and I make sure I state the cite before I talk about the information. Other than that Leandra did an excellent job and really has shown improvement through the semester.
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